Brief Story Synopsis:
An ungrateful person who was never humble, living in a life where he was someone successful but never did help the needy/poor or being ungrateful to those around him. Suddenly he was involved in a natural disaster where the building he's in, collapse. When he regained "conscious", he walked through the city, to find everyone dead. As he walked through the dead city, he find some places which reminded him of some memories which he wish he could have change or appreciate it better, regretting what he did. He later wakes up to find himself in the hospital bed and everything he saw was a dream. And more than that, he turned to become a better man.
So just wana round up some comments or feedback i got from others. =)
I sent an email to my former lecturer Amanda about the story ideas and asked which she would prefer or advice to work with. So here's her feedback.
"Of all the 3 stories, I like the story from the Padang quake best. The 1st two, although meaningful are a little cliche as I've seen students try going down that Emo path for their FYPs and not do well. When you're tackling something emo, like in the poem in this case, it's a lot about bringing out the sad emotions. If not done well, will end up looking flat and emotionless and at times, aimless too.As for the Padang quake, I could see it being done in an experimental sort of way with lots of contrast to play with. His claustrophobia in the dark compared to the open space above him as the workers struggle to dig the survivors out, or that compared to his memories of a time when he enjoyed a time of joy in the open bright sunshine. etc. It's emotional, and yet already has some visuals I can imagine from. There is also somewhat a flow of a story - man calling out in the dark, we realise he's stuck, as soon as he thinks he's about to be saved from sounds he hears, they pass them by. He's about to give up and eventually gets saved. I could see you ending your story with him in the hospital - dramatic sunlight coming through the window... like a glimpse of new hope."
Other feedback that i got from friends were pretty much the same. They preferred the "chaotic" theme and thought that it had more meanings and gives a better take away compared to the "emo" theme". And just like Amanda mention, some might think that the "emo" is overly rated or common. It gives a dead feeling and nothing much to it.
And looking through it, i gave a thought and agreed that the "emo" theme story gives a constant "beeeeeeeeeeeeppp..." like a dead monitor heartbeat and could do much better with the other concept. So here point forward, im gona work on with my chosen story, and yes ask for my Lecturer Ronald's advice or takes about it. And here's what i've discussed with him and what he thought about it.
I told him on the story i chose to work on and what are some of the things im gona portray in the animation, for example, the main character going through his daily lives, being his usual ungrateful rude self, never humble to those around him. And later after the incident, he found himself walking through the "dead" city, remembering those things that he did.
Ronald's feedback:
- Work on the beginning part of the story; how the story starts out.
- I have to work on the visuals, on what i wana portray and make sure that the audience that watches it understand the things that are going on or the meaning of the visuals.
- The ending part of the story is secured.
- Work on the middle part; on what i wana portray (somewhat i think that the middle and the beginning part have to switch/change in some ways)
- The middle part where the main character saw a certain places that reminded him some memories which he wish he could change or appreciate it better; how am i going to portray the character feeling this way, visually by animation.
Some beginning examples he gave:
- At the scene of the incident (the collapse of the buildings), rescuers looking out for survivors, the whole hysteria or disastrous surrounding and the main character under the rubble.
So I'm gona start working on some storyboards and concept sketch.
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